Constructive criticism only please!?

Interesting! I've tried writing lyrics and have failed but you appear to have something quite musical here. A minor point: in the sixth line it should be where not were. I like the attitude in this, lines like 'forget the poor and feed the rich.'(!) brilliant, these lyrics mirror the world we live in where only the privileged few are allowed to live while the rest of us merely exist. The two choruses: 'So this is the way it is' etc are excellent. You have a talent for this. Post some more. And as it's so good and I would like to see it perfect: 'dont' should have an apostrophe: don't - but this is small stuff. It's too good to let these things spoil such a fantastic idea.